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Intro Paragraph Malik A. Alaka

Thesis: The People Of Waknuk Can Not Be Defended Because Of Their Misuse Of The Bible

Since The Bible Even Says //"//He writes the same way in all his letters, speaking in them of these matters. His letters contain some things that are hard to understand, which ignorant and unstable people distort, as they do the other Scriptures, to their own destruction." //2nd Peter (3:16) God Even Says That The Whole Human Race Sometimes Changes His Word It To Something That Fits Their Own Opinion.// -an example of misuse of the Bible is where the Bible says "Wives, submit yourselves to your own husbands as you do to the Lord. For the husband is the head of the wife as Christ is the head of the church, his body, of which he is the Savior" (Ephesians 5:22-23) Some people take this out of context by thinking a woman is is less of a human being or that the men in the marriage do not have to submit to their wives. Is this an introductory paragraph? relation to thesis? structure?

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He writes the same way in all his letters, speaking in them of these matters. His letters contain some things that are hard to understand, which ignorant and unstable people distort, as they do the other Scriptures, to their own destruction." This is a very confusing introduction. You might want to add something before that would explain why you did this. //2nd Peter (3:16)// It's ironic that the people of Waknuk use Nicholson's Repentance's instead of the Bible, since Nicholson's Repentance's was written after the Bible. <this is the srongest sentence in this paragraph. Consider developing it and finding a way to tie it into your thesis. ﻿ In Genesis, the first book in the Bible it says "So God created man in his own image, in the image of God created he him; male and female created he them." Genesis (1:27). How can one say that something is the image of God and anything different is not and shall be cast out if that one has not seen the image of God and his people before him. This does not clearly tie into the thesis. Either find a way to make it clear, or consider getting rid of it and replacing it with something more contributing. Where is the thesis? I can somewhat understand what you are saying, but it is not communicated strongly enough

Edited Intro He writes the same way in all his letters, speaking in them of these matters. His letters contain some things that are hard to understand, which ignorant and unstable people distort, as they do the other Scriptures, to their own destruction." //2nd Peter (3:16)// We all decipher things in our own opinion but most of these things have one meaning, this can lead to our own destruction. It's ironic that the people of Waknuk use Nicholson's Repentances more than the Bible, since Nicholson's Repentance's was written after the Bible what's your point? . Since the people of Waknuk used examples from the Bible doesnt make sense with the sentence before, it is very ignorant that could not see what the first book and its first chapter says, <--grammatical mistake--> it quotes "So God created man in his own image, in the image of God created he him <--what? ; male and female created he them <--don't get what it says " It is very naive of the Waknuk people to see this scripture and say that this is the image of God and anything that differs from this is the Devil and should be withdrawn from its life. How can one say this when they have not yet seen the image of God or even his own forefathers.

1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs Body Paragraph #1 The people of Waknuk unconsciously use the Bible to their own defense against deviation of Waknuk. The people of Waknuk are basically brainwashed by Nicholson's Repentances, so they do not see the love and compassion the Lord has for others that are different and cast out for who they are. A clear example is Matthew (9:36-37) "But when he saw the multitudes, he was moved with compassion on them, because they fainted and were scattered abroad, as sheep having no shepherd'. This can relate to how the people of the Fringes have to raid the town of Waknuk, showing how the people of Waknuk are, the Fringes people have to attack the town to survive from starvation. They have no compassion for deviations also because the church hammers scriptures from Nicholson's Repentances like "ONLY THE IMAGE OF GOD IS MAN" and "KEEP THOU THE PURE STOCK OF THE LORD" into the churchgoers heads. The Christ believing population either avoid,ignore,do not acknowledge, or either take scriptures like Matthew (9:36-37) out of context and misuse them to fit their understandings.

Body Paragraph #2 The norms of Waknuk have tricked themselves into thinking they are the image of God and anything else is the Devil. But this is very ignorant because Genesis (1:27) says "So God created man in his own image in the image of God he created ﻿ him, male and female he created them". So how can one say that since another is different he is the Devil when man is the image of God and one has yet to see his God? But they could have taken this scripture out of context by mixing it with Nicholson's Repentances' definition of a man. But that would also be ignorant because Nicholson's Repenteances was written after the Bible even after Tribulation.Even though they've used examples from the Bible, they are still blinded by their faith and they cannot see what God is really saying , which can and sort of already has brought themselves to their own tribulation. Another example of the norms of Waknuk misunderstanding is the way the way the or prideful, they treat the Fringes people and the way they sterilize the Fringes women, the people that they claim as the "Devil". But arrogance can lead to destruction, an example of this is how Satan gets cast out to Hell because of his arrogance. "Not a novice, lest being puffed up with pride he fall into the same condemnation as the Devil". 1 Timothy (3:6). This scripture shows why the Devil was cast out to Hell. So it is wrong for the people of Waknuk to think they are apart of God, with all of their pride. The Fringes people has not shown any pride, so how can the people of Waknuk say that they are apart of God and the Fringes people are the Devil, when the Devil is considered evil because of his pride, when the people of Waknuk have pride of their normality.

Body Paragraph #3 The people of Waknuk have mainly used Nicholson Repentances more than they have used the Bible. How can one say that he is Christian and he barely uses the book that his religion is based on? Praying and going to church does not make one a Christian, the only way to get into Heaven is to believe that Jesus died on the cross to save us form our sins and recognize that you are a sinner from birth and also to except him as your savior in your heart and live by his teachings. Because of Nicholson's repentances the people of Waknuk believe that "keeping pure of the stock" male you a Christian, but this is wrong because you have to involve your acknowledgment of your sins and your believing that Jesus died on the cross for our sins. The people of Wak cannot be Christian because they do not at all talk about Jesus dieing on the cross or either talk about sins. How can the people of waknuk be a Christian town when they fo not even know the most important part of Christianity.

1.How well are the quotations integrated and analyzed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph The people of Waknuk do not see how they use the Bible wrongly and they don't see how they are not at all Christians. We all fit things the way we wont them to, to fit them to the way we want ot understand them even though it is wrong. Not just with the Bible but with other things in life like rules,symbols and we change them to our undrstandings and when we find out that we are wrong some o us consist that we are right because of our fear of being wrong and feeling ashamed for our ignorance, this is what the people of Waknuk have done, and this stubbornness of change,knowledge and learning can bring them to destruction like their forefathers, the old people.

1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?