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Topic: ** ﻿ Discuss the significance of the title //The Chrysalids.// ** Thesis: The people of Waknuk are breaking free from their chrysalis of bigotry. (thesis can still be worded better, try and include the idea that you will be analyzing the title)

Like a butterfly emerges from the chrysalis of a caterpillar, the people of Waknuk are emerging from the chrysalis of a period of bigotry. In other words, they are changing. simplify

Thesis: The title relates the metamorphic stage of a butterfly, a chrysalid, to the changing society of Waknuk.

Thesis:The title is a metaphor comparing the simlarities between the metamorphic stage of a butterfly, a chrysalid, to the changing society of Waknuk (awesome thesis, just take out "a chrysalid") The title is a metaphor comparing the similarities between the metamorphic stage of a butterfly to the changing society of Waknuk.

=** Brainstorming Worksheet: ** = funnel paragraph : A chrysalid is a state which a caterpillar is in a cocoon, of which the caterpillar will emerge from as a butterfly

1st Point: Waknuk's society's changes. (changed to third)

Waknuk was once overly religious, burning deviational babies, and whipping women for producing deviations. Now women have to say prayers for producing deviations, and deviations were sent to the Fringes. Government cutting down on rules, a democratic world is emerging from the chrysalis of bigotry. Linking Sentence: A good example representing the society of Waknuk's past is Joseph Strorm. ( Is this worded properly? please tell me) (can be easily worded better, just simplify it) Linking sentence from paragraph before: The differences Joseph and David are examples of the major changes that the society of Waknuk undergoes.( Is this worded properly? please tell me)

A chrysalid is a state which a caterpillar is in a cocoon, of which the caterpillar will emerge from as a butterfly Waknuk was once overly religious, burning deviational babies, and whipping women for producing deviations. Now women have to say prayers for producing deviations, and deviations were sent to the Fringes. Government cutting down on rules, a democratic world is emerging from the chrysalis of bigotry. an example of this drastic change is : Compare David with his father. Joseph Strorm is a man who's *faith was born into his sinews*. in other words, he is as faithful as can be. joseph is intolerate to anything that defies the laws of his religion. Examples of this are found in many of the situations David describes: when david wishes he had another hand to clean off the blood, also in the incident of the baker's cat and the giant horses. Clearly joseph strorm represents a sterotypical preacher. David Strorm, the son of joseph strom, is (ironically) a deviation. From an early age, David knew that he was different from other children. he viewed deviations differently after he met Sophie, who is a deviation with an extra toe. After sophie's family flees because someone found out about them, David realised that he would soon be next.
 * suggests that change will happen*

=** Essay Outline: ** =

=** First Draft of my Essay:﻿ ** = ** Intro/funnel paragraph: ** The Chrysalids is a science fiction book studied by thousands of students and is known for its plethora of enigmatic metaphors ( Could this be two sentences? Seems kinda long). These metaphors range from allusions to politics and technology to the prediction of fate. The sheer number of these metaphors is already astonishing, but the truly amazing amazing ( You have the word "amazing" twice) part is their depth. The title for example is ( Take this out. I'm not sure why you have it) ( that paragraph was actually my rough intro, which im not using anymore, but Mr.A told me not to delete anything). (This should all be one paragraph: the intro)

going to assume this is your new intro The title is arguably the most important ingredient in a good novel. It serves to catch the attention of the reader, to symbolize an important theme, but most importantly, to connect deeply to the novel itself. In John Whyndam's //The Chrysalids//, the title does all of the above and more. you're golden up to this point, but why is your thesis (the next sentence) in the middle of your intro? It is a metaphor comparing the similarities of the metamorphic stage of a butterfly to the changing society of Waknuk. The metamorphic stage of a butterfly is known as the cocoon, or the chrysalid. It is the stage where the caterpillar envelopes itself in an impenetrable shell, where it precedes to transform into it's final form: a butterfly. The title implies that the society of Waknuk, which consists of contrasting characters such as David Strorm, and Joseph Strorm, (Do you need to talk about David and Joseph? i kinda get the feel that you think they are similar people. I'm not really sure about this one.) is related to a chrysalis in the sense that it is in a state of change. writing is clear, but structure needs editing

The title is arguably the most important ingredient in a good novel. It serves to catch the attention of the reader, to symbolize an important theme, but most importantly, to connect deeply to the novel itself. In John Whyndam's //The Chrysalids//, the title does all of the above and more. It catches the reader's attention and symbolizes the theme of change through the use of a metaphor that compares the situation of the people of Waknuk to the chrysalis stage of a butterfly. This stage is a caterpillar's phase of change where it envelopes itself in an impenetrable shell, where it precedes to transform into it's final form: a butterfly. The title implies that the society of Waknuk, which consists of contrasting characters such as David Strorm, and Joseph Strorm, is related to a chrysalid in the sense that both of them are phases of change. It is a metaphor comparing the similarities of the metamorphic stage of a butterfly to the changing society of Waknuk.

Body 1:
The Society of Waknuk has undergone many changes since tribulation, like how a caterpillar undergoes many changes inside its chrysalid. Changes to Waknuk's society, as to a caterpillar, occurred slowly. Waknuk's people originally rejected change such as slackening of punishments related to deviations and other ant-bigotratic thoughts. Ironically, the very changes that the people denied were implemented on them overtime. "When my father was a young man, a woman who bore a child that wasn't the image was whipped for it. if she bore three out the image, she was uncertified, outlawed and sold." This seems very harsh compared to the few prayers of penance women were required to do at their present time and the past three child penalty makes the present three child penalty of an optional divorce seems like a blessing (I dont like this paragraph Try re wording. And im not really sure what your point is here). This quote, along with a few others describing how deviations were burnt just like mutants, clearly states that the society of Waknuk has changed. A society denying change is like a chrysalid denying evolution in the sense that attempts to deny any of these events are futile ( You use the word deny twice in this sentence. Try rewording). The Society of Waknuk is similar to a chrysalid because they both enforce change.

The Society of Waknuk, like a caterpillar in a chrysalid, has undergone many changes since it's birth. These changes occurred slowly, as for Waknuk's people originally rejected change such as slackening of punishments related to deviations and other religion related traditions. Ironically, the very changes that the people denied were implemented on them overtime. Jacob recalls these changes on pg.88 "When my father was a young man, a woman who bore a child that wasn't the image was whipped for it. if she bore three out the image, she was uncertified, outlawed and sold." It can inferred that a lot of changes have happened since Jacob's time because the punishments for women who bare deviated children today, a few words of penance, are significantly less harsh than the punishments Jacob quoted. This quote, along with a few others describing how deviations were burn't ( Dont descride what the quote has said. The reader already knows that), clearly states that the society of Waknuk has changed. A society denying change is like a chrysalid denying evolution in the sense that attempts to deny any of these events are futile. The Society of Waknuk is similar to a chrysalid because they both enforce change.

Body 2:
Waknuk's society is divided into two halves like how a chrysalid splits in two after the butterfly breaks free. These two halves represent the two opposing sides of society: (You are using the word two too much in these few sentences )the first representing the part of society that denies change and the latter representing the part of society that desires change. John Whyndam places Joseph and David Strorm as mascots for their respective sides. Joseph is a man who values religion over everything else, one who's faith was born into his sinews. His faith is so strong (I dont think his relgion pratices would be called strong, I think they are more "over the top") that he immediately dismisses anything, including change, that contradicts with the values and beliefs of his religion. Ironically, his son, David, questions his father's beliefs. David is a mutant who, after witnessing the incident of Sophie Wender, accepts and welcomes change. David's reaction of Sophie on page is contradictory to Joseph's reaction on page___. The two reactions stated represent the two struggling sides of Waknuk's Society, one that is reluctant to change, and one that creates change. Eventually, a solution will emerge from their struggle. These two sides of Waknuk's society are similar to a chrysalid in the sense that when the chrysalid splits into two halves, a final product will emerge. (I understand your point but try re wording from a whole different direction because the wording is kinda confusing)

Waknuk's society is split into two sides. Like the splitting pieces of a chrysalid when the butterfly tries to break free of its shell, the two sides of Waknuk's society are in a constant struggle. These sides are the cause of Waknuk's problems because they have conflicting views: one side rejecting change, and the other accepting change. John Whyndam juxtaposes these sides through Joseph and David Strorm, who have conflicting opinions even though they live beside eachother as father and son. Jospeh is a man who values religion over everything and a man whose faith was born into his sinews. His faith is so strong that he immediately dismisses anything, including change, that contradicts the beliefs of his religion. Ironically, his son David is the very blasphemous creature that Joseph descriminated against his entire life : a mutant. David, unlike Joseph, accepts change.Joseph forced his view on David, but after witnessing the banishment of Sophie Wender, David realized that this view was wrong. On page 55, David defends Sophie saying " But Sophie //isn't// really different-not in any other way." Joseph, however, scrutinizes Sophie on page 51, " Who was this child-this blasphemy- you were with yesterday?" Simply put, David accepts that Sophie is deviated, or changed, and Joseph does not. David's side of society accepts people for who they are, and Joseph's side discriminates based on image. The Society of Waknuk is similar to a chrysalid because they are both split into pieces.

Like a repelling and blank chrysalid, Waknuk's final conflict concludes with an unexpected outcome. It may seem highly unlikely that a creature as beautiful as a butterfly emerged from something as plain as a cocoon, and likewise that a technologically advanced society such as the Sealanders, saves David and Co. and airlifts them to a new world. On page 200, David could not believe that he was flying through the air over the city in his dreams "It //is// real isn't it? You can see it too?" Even David himself must admit that the last fight had ended abruptly. But although it seems unlikely, both these scenarios have a cause. Inside its chrysalid, the caterpillar undergoes the many changes that transform it into a butterfly, therefor emerging from the cocoon as a butterfly is no surprise to the caterpillar. In the novel, David and Co. are telepaths who can communicate to one another from far distances without making a sound. One member of their group, Petra, communicated with the people from Sealand prior to their final conflict with the other side of Waknuk's Society. Although they may seem accidental, the conclusion of Waknuk's conflicts and the emergence of a butterfly from a chrysalid are both planned actions. Waknuk's Society is similar to a chrysalid because they both end with unexpected, yet planned outcomes.
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Conclusion:
Waknuk's society and a chrysalis have a lot in common, such as the enforcement of change, and the emergence of an unexpected outcome.These similarities symbolize a significant amount of the story's plot, and may have compelled John Whyndam to choose //The Chysalids// as the title of this book. Through the use of a metaphor, the title meets the criteria for a successful title: It catches the attention of the reader, symbolizes an important theme, and most importantly, it connects deeply to the novel itself. It contains the first words that the reader reads, and must make a lasting impression on the reader if the author wishes for the reader to continue reading. Though debatable, the title is one of the most significant pieces of The Chrysalids.

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1.Your name 2. An Approved Topic 3. Brainstorming Worksheet 4. Essay Outline 5. First Draft of your Essay 6. Peer Comments - Group Members Maddy: Semaon: Jasper:

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph Maddy 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs Jasper 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph Semaon 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay? 7. Good Copy in MLA format