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 ﻿ 1. Julian Psihogios 2. Discuss the idea of "deviations". What purpose does it serve in the novel? Thesis - In the novel "The Christalids" the concept of deviations is abused in describing discrimination involving the choises that the people in Waknuk make. Thesis needs editing

In the novel //The Chrysalids//, the concept of deviations reflect how people act and how they involve other characters in their excruciating decisions. (getting better, but still needs editing, too specific to novel. What does the second half of your thesis mean?) In the novel //The Chrysalids,// the concept of deviations reflect how people act and how discrimination towards others uses real life scenarios to address decisions made by people in the novel. 3. Brainstorming Worksheet 4. Essay Outline INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH The word deviation is a very powerful word. In the book ( novel "The Chrysalids"), deviation is a term used to describe people ( or things ) that are not the image described in Nicholas' Reprentences. I feel that the amount of emphasis put on the topic of deviations is a lot more important than other topics discused in //The Chrysalids//. The way that //The Chrysalids// describes discrimination is very important because the people in this novel don't know how extreme discrimination actually is ( ﻿explain what the extreme discrimination is). They ( be specific of who you are talking about) think that to put people down becasue of their skin colour is funny or amusing, when [what they don't know is that] ( they dont really need to be there) it is very concerning and very mean to the person who is getting bullied (. THESIS INPUT HERE Intro needs substantial editing. Please read "quoting tips". It's located in the the additional support material page
 * the ideas of discrimination reflecton the main plot in the story involving "Aunt Harriet" and "Sophie"
 * the characters in the story are greatly abused or pressured, including a factor in Aunt Harriet's death, isues to do with David Strorms dreams, reasons for the psychopaths running away and people in "The Fringes"
 * it also affects them in how they can live their lives, because of Jason Strorm (the most heavily religious person in Waknuk), the people who are deviations feel underachieved or not good evough for the world where people live with the fear of discrimination

INTRODUCTION PARAGRAPH The word deviation is a very powerful word. In the novel //The Chrysalids,// deviation is a term used to describe people or things that are not the image described in //Nicholson's Reprentences//. The amount of emphasis put on the topic of deviations is a lot more important than other topics discused in //The Chrysalids.// Different ways are used to describe the discrimination in //The Chrysalids// and also its importance because the people in this novel are trying to stay in the image of //Nickolson's Reprentences//. For example, in the novel, discrimination is shown by the people of waknuk saying you need a certificate explaining that your child is "norm". In the novel //The Chrysalids//, the concept of deviations reflect how people act and how they involve other characters in their excruciating decisions.

Body Paragraph #1 <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">The characters in the novel are very abusive to each other using verbal, and physical actions. The ways( go for specfics here, maybe use another word because ways is pretty genereal ) that they use these actions is unexeptable but understandable at the same time. As described in the book, David's father is the most religeous person in Waknuk and believes that everyone in Waknuk should be in the image told in //The Reprentences.// get rid of the so He goes to extreme measures to keep the town pure so that tribulation doesn't happen again. "When they broke the news to me next day that my Aunt Harriet's body had been found in the river, no on mentioned a baby." This quote reflects on the talk that she had with David's mother. David's mother was over agressive, saying things that no mother would ever want to hear( revise this sentence). "Harriet, are you telling me that you have not got a certificate. Harriet let me see that child - properly. Monster!" Needing a "norm" certificate was one abusive physical action taken place, because it drove Aunt Harriet to death with no sign of her baby. explain this more Another one being when Joseph Strorm (David's father) got upset at him when David when he said he wished he had another hand. However, in use however instead of but these reasonings could be argued against. The way that Jason acted was cruel but he was doing it for the safety of the town, and knew that he needed to keep pure in order to keep tribulation away. The ways of the Waknuk people are cruel and yet true to what they believe but their actions need to be changed.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Body Paragraph #2 <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">In the novel characters in the story are affected by the act of deviations. There are serious decisions made by characters and the acts that occur after. For example, a huge part of the story was when the characters ran away after the people of Waknuk had the hatred against them. Other facts support them running away <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">this is weak, one being that they found other people with telepathic powers. Deviations are main in a novel like //The Chysalids// <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">there are other novels with deviations?revise. because they were forced against their abilities, and how they were discriminated against because of their “power” of telepathy. The ways <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">rephrase Joseph strorm acted were increadibly unexeptable. He made his son dislike him and all of David's kind. Him being this strict go with, <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">" His strict parenting ..." helped them make their decision of running away also allowing them to take freely of their lives. However when running away they were faced with dangers on their journey to find the //Sealand People.// So what <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; line-height: 17px;">Joseph Strorm actually did with discriminating against deviations is hurt them and made them suffer. <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">Even some of David's friends, Sally and Katherine got kidnapped and tourtured, disrupting them in their journey. Deviations run throughout the novel but aren't treated as fairly as they should <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">be.

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">Body Paragraph #3 <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">The deviations cannot live a normal life becuase of the pressure and hate applied on them. The deviations that live in Waknuk are hated and despised of greatly, thus when a deviation is present their only objective is to get rid of it so that their town stays pure and had less chance <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">( dont use away maybe use " and has less chance of tribulation ) of tribulation. For example, when David mentioned that he wished he had another hand, his father freaked <span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 11pt; line-height: 115%;">( use a more formal word) out, even though David was joking knowing that it could never happen. "And you wished you had a third hand! No, father. I only said //if// I had another hand...You - my own son - were calling upon the Devil to give you another hand!" One of the main reasons for the deviation's emense amount of pressure is <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; line-height: 17px;">Joseph Strorm. He believes that everyone must be the image described in //Nicholson's Reprentences.// That image being " And God created man in His own image. And God decreed that man should have one body, one head, two arms and two legs: that each arm should be jointed in two places and end in one hand: that each hand should have four fingers and one thumb: that each finger should bear a flat finger-nail. . ." With <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 15px; line-height: 17px;">Joseph believing in this, a mole on your face would ban you from their community. aha thats funny- not very formal for a essay though. maybe say having a mole on ones face would have them banned from their community for life.. If just a mole was that much of a problem then telepathy would be instant death. David is forced to keep this a secret from his father when his Uncle Axel knows. Imagine you were him. this is good - dont know if mr.a will go for it though. Keeping your get rid of possibly biggest secret away from your own father that would probably murder you if he found out is like lying to stay alive. Also, how could you live under the pressure that the fringes people are said to be responsible for all things be specific. not scientifically proven in Waknuk, like bad weather and deviations, and the fringes people are deviations. When someone believes that you could cause all evil in a certain place then

Conclusion //The Chrysalids// is a novel where deviations and discrimination rule the story. This book teaches a lot of lessons; do not discriminate, do not judge people by their cover, and so on. Infact the most important thing about this novel is the fact that it relates the book to everyday society and reminds us that us as humans do these things to other people to. Many people everyday die because they are overwhelmed with the pressures with bullying, and i think (no personal nouns) the way that this book reflects this topic is very essential. This novel describes deviations and all troubles caused with it, but ask yourself...would you want to be in David's shoes?
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<span style="background-color: #ff7575; color: #000000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph
 * 1) <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Does the introduction paragraph grab your attantion? Does it anticipate an insightful thesis?
 * 2) <span style="color: #000000; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

<span style="background-color: #a7b0e7; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Person 2 - Body Paragraphs
 * 1) <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters?
 * 2) <span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

<span style="background-color: #1ffb13; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph
 * 1) <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary.
 * 2) <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">Does the conclusion have a mermorable ending?
 * 3) <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">How strong is the development of the argument forthe whole essay?

<span style="background-color: #ffffff; font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; line-height: 0px; overflow: hidden;"> <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">5. First Draft of your Essay <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">6. Peer Comments - Group Members <span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif;">7. Good Copy in MLA format