Catherine

Catherine 1. Your name 2. An Approved Topic 3. Brainstorming Worksheet Chrysalids= changing Characters in the novel try to resist changes/ evolution. ( such as not being open minded about deviations) Somewhat related to the topics discrimination and evolution. Real life example includes people who protest against homosexuals. Homophobias Stages of butterfly= stages that the characters went through. Innocent to mature CHANGES CAN'T POSSIBLY BE AVOIDED. There will be consequences.

4. Essay Outline

Thesis: The significance of the title, "The Chrysalids," incorporates the idea that humans cannot avoid changes.

__** 1st point - Changes can be good or bad. Either way humans cannot survive without adapting to, or accepting changes. It depends on your attitude, so there is no point in resisting changes. **__

(Ex. Waknuk's rule about deviations and the " true image". Differences and unique appearances will come in handy one day. Just like how David and his group of friends were able to escape the war between Waknuk and the fringes, with the help of telepathy. )

__** 2nd point - Everything happens for a reason. Every little change in life creates an alternate path. Instead of neglecting changes or differences, people should learn to accept them and take it as an oppetunity to expand them to something useful.Even if the change is bad, make it good. **__ (Ex. Petra had an extraordinary telepathic ability. Instead of trying to hide it or ignore it, she played around with her ability and mastered it fully. Eventually she was able to benefit from her telepathy ability, and even saved people's lives with it. ( by communicating with the people from sealand)

__** 3rd point- By definition, the word chrysalis refers to an insect in a cocoon, waiting to transform into adult life. It represents the evolution and changes that the characters go through in the novel. **__

( Ex. David Strorm experienced many changes . Although some were hard and troublesome, but these experiences helped him strengthen his physical tolerance and mental tolerance)

5. First Draft of your Essay

As you stand in front of a polished mirror, staring intensely into your reflection. Your thoughts running fast through your mind, and your lips slowly form an oval shape. Your eyes quickly scan through the perfect duplicate, but your brain, the central control system, refuses to recognize it. " Who is this?" You slowly murmur to yourself. Without a doubt, you are in awe of all these dramatic changes that have germinated a brand new you. Whether or not these changes have met up with your satisfaction, you have somehow managed to adapt to them almost unconsciously. In one's life time, changes will keep on occurring, and they are the motor to push you keep on moving. Some say it is possible to resist changes, like the Waknuk society in the book The Chysalids. However, i have a different suggestion. My opinion states that human's cannot possibly avoid changes. intro needs editing: this is a formal essay, not personal pronouns allowed. Also, opening sentences are a bit elementary; you can word them at a grade 9 level
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Have you ever tried standing in front of a polished mirror, and stared intensely into your self reflection. Your thoughts running fast through your mind, and your lips slowly form an oval shape. Your eyes quickly scan through the perfect duplicate, but your brain, the central control system, refuses to recognize it. " Who is this?" You slowly murmur to yourself. Without a doubt, you are in awe of all these dramatic changes that have germinated a brand new you. Whether or not these changes have met up with your satisfaction, you have somehow managed to adapt to them almost unconsciously. In one's life time, changes will keep on occurring, and they are the motor to push you keep on moving. Some say it is possible to resist changes, like the Waknuk society in the book //The Chysalids.// However, this theory is not true. Evidences state that the human race cannot possibly avoid changes.
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Human behavior will always be changing, whether consciously or unconsciously. It is close to impossible to remain not the right word, because life cannot possibly advance without adapting to change of situations. Technology is the best example of advanced human progression. The constant yet irregular pace of successful inventions are the only reasons that permit humans to access a healthier and better life. Unfortunately, there are many uneducated people in the world who forcefully refuse to accept the theory of changing. The Waknuk society in the novel //The Chrysalids,// symbolizes the idea of disbelievers struggling against evolution. These scenarios exist in real life, and their ignorance should no longer be neglected. It is true that evolution is essential to our daily life because it is simply pointless to fight against nature. As such the novel suggest that humans cannot possibly survive without changes.
 * __Introduction Revised II:__**

Human behavior will always be changing, whether consciously or unconsciously. It is close to impossible to remain the same, because life cannot possibly advance without adapting to change of situations. Technology is the best example of advanced human progression. The constant yet irregular pace of successful inventions are the only reasons that permit humans to access a healthier and better life. Unfortunately, there are many uneducated people in the world who forcefully refuse to accept the theory of changing. The Waknuk society in the novel //The Chrysalids,// symbolizes the idea of disbelievers struggling against evolution. These scenarios exist in real life, and their ignorance should no longer be neglected. It is true that evolution is essential to our daily life because it is simply pointless to fight against nature. As such the novel suggest that humans cannot possibly survive without changes.
 * __Introduction Revised III:__**

__**Body Paragraph 1:**__ Nothing in life goes perfectly according to wishes or plans. Things change unexpectedly at all time,because life doesn't care whether or not humans are ready to face challenges. When deciding to accept and adapt to the changes, or bidding on wherever the new direction travels to, every new path will eventually lead to different varieties of opportunities. Attitude determines how well humans respond to these challenges ,and also conclude the positive or negative effects these changes result from. For people who were born naturally with disabilities often have no chance of getting cured in their life time. However, they do have an option on where they want these given choices to take them to. If they simply refuse to accept their difference, life will treat them miserably. As time moves on, their faith in themselves will rapidly decrease. Their self-consciousness and the desire to be normal will eventually take control over their soul. Nevertheless, if they chose to face life with courage,faith and hope, then a much happier life could have been presented. Life is so short, pointless resistance and grieving will only make the situation worse than it already is. The residents of Waknuk are perfect examples of such circumstance. Only if they had been loose on the requirements for appearances, all the deaths and wars would have been avoided.(pg. 186-187, battle of Fringes and Waknuk).Only if they had been more open minded about being different and unique appearances, then it wouldn't have led to an unsuccessfully ruled empire.

__**Body Paragraph 2:**__ Acceptance is often not the only solution. Adapting to the change is just as important as accepting the reality**.** When standing in front of every node, many alternate paths are being constructed as one decides on which major intersection to take. When an unexpected change occurs ,don't be afraid to explore around and expand the surprise to its fullest. In the novel //The Chrysalids//, the character Petra was gifted with an outstanding telepathy ability. However, growing up in a god-feared community, telepathy or any other abnormal abilities were considered as devil contacting activities.Petra was influenced by her surrounding that being gifted was wrong, and the whole town was under the pressure of hoping to stay as " original" as possible. The criticism and warnings did not bring Petra down, nor did it stop her from taking her ability to the next step. She soon found out through experimenting that it was possible for her to send telepathic messages to people half way around the world."... Somebody asking questions. She's long way, a very long way away, i think."( pg. 134 ) If it wasn't for her intelligence and wise choice of exploring her talent to its fullest, the Sealand people would've never gotten in contact with the telepathy group. In other words, Petra saved their lives by simply choosing to take advantage of her gift.

__**Body Paragraph 3:**__ Challenges and difficulties are often the key factors to reach maturity. If one doesn't go through such hardship and changes, then one's purpose in life has failed. Whether these experiences are fun adventures or tough journeys, they will train and strengthen a person in many useful ways. The character David Strorm from the novel //The Chrysalids//, sets up a perfect example to demonstrate how evolution improves one's mental tolerance and physical tolerance. Many readers have acknowledged the fact that David went through a great amount of trouble in this novel. In fact, the whole novel emphasized the existing problems in today's society, through David's life story. These issues started off when David was still a defenseless child, who knew nothing about the cruelty of being different. It wasn't until his first argument with his father Joseph Strorm, (pg 26) over a careless statement David made about wishing for an extra arm. Joseph's anger and physical abuse planted a dark memory on David's mind. As time moved on, the ugly truth behind the injustice of the world eventually revealed to David. Sophie's capture (pg 56) made David panic and went into depression. He had a strong urge to escape from Waknuk (pg 56), but truthfully, he was only choosing to escape from the reality instead of facing them. The incident with Aunt Harriet and her baby (pg.72) once again had an enormous impact on David's life. His eyes snapped open when he witnessed yet another tragic event, all because the society refused to accept even the slightest difference. However, David's perspective gradually changed as he grew older. He was no longer escaping, but doing his job to protect his friends and the ones he loved. Fear only made him more determined. Pressure and responsibility brought out the strongest yet the softest side of him. He was standing up for himself instead of backing down; he was battling and fighting for liberty instead of obeying the terrifying rules. All because these he was brave enough to face these challenges, and thankfully these challenges successfully influenced him to be a better person.

__**Conclusion:**__ Living in a complex world full of demanding questions and doubtful solutions, it is no surprise that human mind is designed to modify according to different situations. Whether being under peer pressure, or encountering with natural causes, adpating and accepting changes have become the most essential human instincts. Changes cannot be avoided. For instance, humans cannot possibly resist changes in their body parts. Foolish initiatives like that will most likely lead to pointless battles with mother nature. Therefore, there is no choice but to accept the instructed choices with a positive attitude. There is certainly no restriction on taking advantage of change, and modify it into a useful skill. Remember, no matter which choices are given, you always have the right to construct your life. It's a challenge to be on the right track, but an easy task to fall off onto the wrong track. After all, the road to succession will always be under construction.

6. Peer Comments

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analyzed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

- Group Members - Colin Zhao

7. Good Copy in MLA format