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1.Your name 2. An Approv ﻿ ed Topic 3. Brainstorming Worksheet 4. Essay Outline 5. First Draft of your Essay 6. Peer Comments - Group Members Sean Lo Alex Choi Malik Alaka 7. Good Copy in MLA format

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Essay Topic:
 * 1) 8- Discuss the idea of "deviations." What purpose does it serve in the novel?

Thesis: In the Chrysalids, the idea of "deviations" contributes to the novel's theme of discrimination. good thesis

Brainstorming Ideas **-** Evidence or examples from the text that support your topic. Do not forget to provide page numbers. NOT FINISHED

- This novel fits in the science fiction genre, therefore it comments on today's society. - It has a strong emphasis on the idea of discrimination today. - Race and society's standards are often a cause for war. - In the Chrysalids, even after being wiped out by a war, they still continue to discriminate. - Their society is therefore corrupt, and they're behind on technology and many other things. - This, in my opinion, is how this book comments on today's society.

- "Will you keep a secret- an important secret- for her sake?..............................You- you saw her foot?....her toes?...........If anyone were to find out, they'd- they'd be terribly unkind to her. We've got to see that that never happens." (Pg. 12) - ^ Sophie's toes make her a deviation, and if discovered, she would be isolated by society, and sent to the Fringes. - Deviations, are just people who look differently. Differences (the key word), and change, intimidate people. -This is because humans generally feel more uncomfortable, vulnerable, and scared around things they are not familiar with. Violence is often the way they deal with situations like this. - Sophie's toes, and all the other deviations are a metaphor for everyone in today's society who is different. They are discrminated against just like people are today. - The idea of deviations is a very visual one. Even though David and his group of telepaths were deviations from birth, they were accepted into society for almost 15 years because they looked normal. That shows how deviations are the same on the inside. - Today, we are all different on the outside. Whether it be skin color, race, imprefections or deformations, we should always be accepting of eachother, because together we can move forward and improve as a society.

“[|The very ink with which all history is written is merely fluid prejudice]” (Mark Twain, 1835- 1910) Title

First Paragraph (Edited) Discrimination is a defence reflex, used in society as a reaction to intimidation, vulnerability and fright. It is a dominant factor in our society today, as well as the one portrayed in the science fiction novel __The Chrysalids.__ It's genre, being science fiction, is known for using future settings to comment on present day problems in society. The author does this with the idea of "deviations", ﻿ be specific to point out the challenges we have with discrimination today. That is why in __The Chrysalids__, the idea of "deviations" contributes to the novel's theme of discrimination. try to keep it as one connected sentence and make sure to capitalize the "Deviation"

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Discrimination is a defence reflex, used as a reaction to intimidation, vulnerability and fright. It is a dominant factor in present day society, as well as a theme in the science fiction novel __The Chrysalids__. In such genre, the purpose of a theme is to embody a problem we have today, so that it's negativity can be highlighted by certain aspects of the novel. In The Chrysalids, those aspects are the deviations, for the morals learned as a result of their troubles are what highlight the theme of discrimination.

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<span style="font: 13px/19px Arial; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">ALTERNATE ENDING TO FIRST PARAGRAPH <span style="font: 13px/19px Arial; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">Discrimination is a defence reflex, used as a reaction to intimidation, vulnerability and fright. It is a dominant factor in present day society, as well as a theme in the science fiction novel __The Chrysalids__. In such genre, the purpose of a theme is to embody a problem we have today, so that it's negativity can be highlighted by certain aspects of the novel. In The Chrysalids, those aspects are the deviations, for they highlight the theme of discrimination.

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<span style="font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;">Throughout his novel, John Wyndham uses the idea of deviations to represent those being discriminated against today. They are discriminated against for both physical and phycological reasons, similar to what happens in this generation. Physically, deviations can punished for the most minor of imperfections. In the unstable society of Waknuk, the character of Aunt Harriet gave birth to a baby who was stereotyped due to what seemed to be a birthmark. Although victim's today aren't judged as harshly, the general idea has not changed, for we still judge based on first impression. In terms of phycological judgement, the Waknuk society discriminates against the deviations because they refuse to accept flaw in their most prized cultural aspect, religion. They rely on it to connect them with the “Old People,” the ones they believe to be the roots of their culture. By not adhering to the “True Image of God,” the deviations are in effect defying religion, and are therefore feared among society. Deviations are living proof of flaws in the religious system, and considering Waknuk was centered around it, it's people felt lost and vulnerable when they saw them. In an act of denial, this brainwashed group of people attempted to defend themselves by eliminating all contradicting aspects in their society, hence discrimination.

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<span style="font: 12px/19px Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; margin: 0px;">The outcome of discrimination today is accented by the deviations during the final events of the novel. As a result of this consequential act, the society, however diverse it may be, suffers severe losses. The majority of the deviations die towards the end, and the more superior of the Waknuk community do the same. Deviations being discriminated against is a recurring idea in the novel. However, ironically enough, the demise of the Waknuk society was caused by the same deviations they tried so hard to contain. The moral of this story, being the golden rule, states that despite their differences, the people of Waknuk were wrong to discriminate against the powerless deviations in their society. This is emphasized when the Sealand Woman manages to kill off those she considered worthless and un- evolved. Although she proves that power is not influenced by whether one is a deviation or not, she demonstrates that she too discriminates, just on a new base. The Chrysalids is supposedly set in a post- apocalyptic time, right after a nuclear war, caused by discrimination, wiped out most civilizations. However, if all these characters, whether they be from Sealand, or Waknuk, continue to discriminate, are they too, heading for another war, and in effect, another apocalypse? Is this repetitive cycle what awaits the human race? This idea shows how deviations can contribute to discrimination by being the victims, however they can be the ones superior as well. They demonstrate the fragile state of the society, and how easy it is to destroy it.

Concluding Paragraph (Rough)

The effects of discrimination lead to the World Wars, and their aftermath consisted of shear panic. John Wyndham wrote this novel during that time period in hopes of preventing deathly occurrences like that forever. Unfortunately, discrimination still manages to exist today, as we continue to ignore it’s effects on our society. It seems that our generation, however advanced it may be, can still learn from the simple morals of The Chrsyalids, for we have not yet evolved out of that 1950's phase. Devitations are discriminated against, for the smallest and most insignificant of reasons, however they are enough to create a diverse society in the novel. This diverse society however, can spark a movement that would repeat the very history John Wyndham wrote about. This is refering directly to the outcome of our society, if we do not stop consistantly judging one another. Discrimination is a theme in this science fiction novel to teach the readers about equality, and the deviations, who we can relate to and sympathize with, contribute to that cause. _ _

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<span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> Concluding Paragraph (Rough)

<span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> The effects of discrimination lead to the World Wars, and their aftermath consisted of shear panic. John Wyndham wrote this novel during that time period in hopes of preventing deathly occurrences like that forever. Unfortunately, discrimination still manages to exist today, as we continue to ignore it’s effects on our society. It seems that our generation, however advanced it may be, can still learn from the simple morals of The Chrsyalids, for we have not yet evolved out of that 1950's phase. Devitations are discriminated against, for the smallest and most insignificant of reasons, however they are enough to create a diverse society in the novel. This diverse society however, can spark a movement that would repeat the very history John Wyndham wrote about. This is refering directly to the outcome of our society, if we do not stop consistantly judging one another. Discrimination is a theme in this science fiction novel to teach the readers about equality, and the deviations, who can play contrasting roles in this battle, contribute to that cause.

<span style="font-family: arial,helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;">ESSAY

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> Discrimination is a defense reflex, used as a reaction to intimidation, vulnerability and fright. It is a dominant factor in today's society, as well as a theme in the science fiction novel __The Chrysalids__. In such genre, the purpose of a theme is to embody a current issue so that it's negativity can be accented by certain aspects of the novel. In __The Chrysalids__, those aspects are the deviations, for they highlight the theme of discrimination.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> Throughout his novel, John Wyndham uses the idea of deviations to represent those being discriminated against today. He does this by taking the reasons for which society discriminates today and applying them to. Physically, deviations can punished for the most minor of imperfections. In the unstable society of Waknuk, the character of Aunt Harriet gave birth to a baby who was stereotyped due to what seemed to be a birthmark. Although victim's today aren't judged as harshly, the general idea has not changed, for we still judge based on first impression. In terms of phycological judgement, the society of Waknuk discriminates against the deviations because they refuse to accept flaw in their most prized cultural aspect, religion. They rely on it to connect them with the “Old People,” the ones they believe to be the roots of their culture. By not adhering to the “True Image of God,” the deviations are in effect defying religion, and are therefore feared among society. Deviations are living proof of flaws in the religious system, and considering Waknuk was centered around it, it's people felt lost and vulnerable living alongside them. In an act of denial, this brainwashed group of people attempted to defend themselves by eliminating all contradicting aspects in their society, hence discrimination.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> Throughout the novel, the methods by which society discriminates allow the readers to sympathize with the deviations. Considering their troubles are a prime example of what victims today must face, the readers can apply this knowledge to prevent discrimination in their lives today. In __The Chrysalids,__ deviations must endure various punishments such as banishment to the Fringes, death, sterilization and torture. Although today’s society doesn’t punish the victims as dramatically, the basis for discrimination remains the same. A particularly strong exchange features Sophie just after she brought David into her home in the Fringes. It was quite a contrast from her cottage, a cave with a few makeshift belongings. She complains to David, “...I- oh why do they do that to us? Why didn’t they kill me? It would have been kinder than this...(c. 15) John Wyndham created the protagonists to be deviations, so that the readers are able relate and sympathize with them during times of trouble. He did this in hopes of the readers applying this sympathy and understanding to their lives with the real victims. That is why discrimination is a theme in this novel, and the deviations contribute to it with their morals.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> The outcome of discrimination today is accented by the deviations during the final events of the novel. As a result of this consequential act, the society, however diverse it may be, suffers severe losses. The majority of the deviations die towards the end, and the more superior of the Waknuk community do the same. Deviations being discriminated against is a recurring idea in the novel. However, ironically enough, the demise of the Waknuk society was caused by the same deviations they tried so hard to contain. The moral of this story, being the golden rule, states that despite their differences, the people of Waknuk were wrong to discriminate against the powerless deviations in their society. This is emphasized when the Sealand Woman manages to kill those she considered worthless and un-evolved. Although she proves that power is not influenced by whether one is a deviation or not, she demonstrates that she too discriminates, just on a new base. __The Chrysalids__ is supposedly set in a post- apocalyptic time, right after a nuclear war, caused by discrimination, wiped out most civilizations. However, if all these characters, whether they be from Sealand, or Waknuk, continue to discriminate, are they too, heading for another war, and in effect, another apocalypse? Is this repetitive cycle what awaits the human race? This idea shows how deviations can contribute to discrimination by being the victims, however they can be the ones superior as well. They demonstrate the fragile state of the society, and how easy it is to destroy it.

<span style="font-family: Arial,Helvetica,sans-serif; font-size: 13px; font: normal normal normal 12px/normal Helvetica; letter-spacing: 0px; line-height: 19px; margin: 0px;"> The effects of discrimination lead to the World Wars, and their aftermath consisted of shear panic. John Wyndham wrote this novel during that time period in hopes of preventing deathly occurrences like that forever. Unfortunately, discrimination still manages to exist today, as we continue to ignore it’s effects on our society. It seems that our generation, however advanced it may be, can still learn from the simple morals of __The Chrysalids__, for we have not yet evolved out of that 1950's phase. Deviations are discriminated against, for the smallest and most insignificant of reasons, however they are enough to create a diverse society in the novel. This diverse society however, can spark a movement that would repeat the very history John Wyndham wrote about. This is referring directly to the outcome of our society, if we do not stop consistently judging one another. Discrimination is a theme in this science fiction novel to teach the readers about equality, and the deviations, who we can relate to and sympathize with, contribute to that cause.