Erick+nico+Rodriguez

1.Your name __//** Erick nico Rodriguez **//__

............................................"QUOTES".....................................

**"And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. it is neither man nor woman. It is blasphemy against the true Image of God, and hateful in the sight of God."** __ this is the quote that drove waknuk into the wrong direction as it was like giving them a free pass to discriminate. __ ** "A blasphemy was, as had been impressed upon me often eno ** **  ugh, a frightful thing. Yet there was nothing frightful about Sophie. She was simply an ordinary girl - if a great deal more sensible and braver than most." ** this is a clear __ example of the level of religiosity of Joseph Strorm ( David's dad), that he engraves the thought of an ideal image and that everything outside of that circle is a blasphemy... clearly David sees no harm in whats around him, nor is it. __ ** "As the sun rose we would sing a hymn while my father ceremoniously slaughtered the two-headed calf, four-legged chicken, or whatever other kind of Offence it happened to be. Sometimes it would be a much queerer thing than those..." ** __ This impacted me a lot because this shows how much he hated "deviations" but also in the bible it sais to love God's creation. __ ** "When anyone brings from the herd or flock a fellowship offering to the LORD to fulfill a special vow or as a freewill offering, it must be without defect or blemish to be acceptable." **

2. An Approved Topic
 * religion is an important part of the lives of the people of waknuk but it is abused and manipulated in very un religious ways.**
 * - In the chrysalids religon is used as a terminal to desriminate...or...In the chrysalids religon is used as a disguise to descrminate**
 * -In the chrysalids...**


 * Thesis: The Chrysalids suggests that religion is used to disguise society's discrimination**

For the introduction, maybe talk about religion and then talk about how it can effect peoples lives positively and negatively then lead into how chrysalids uses religion to disguise discrimination..? :p *like* lol 3. Brainstorming Worksheet INTRODUCTION:
 * how am i going to grab the readers attention- maby start with forshadowing my theisis^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
 * talk abt the perfect image

religion is a topic general people don't like to discuss because it is a belief. It is something that they have been born in, taught by their parents family members or relatives, in that spiritual bond. It is all they want to know, displeased with any thing that contradicts it. invoved deep (courage), limits of religon) (?) good start, but it needs work: phrasing and grammar need editing

-Religion is not a favorable topic that people generaly like to debate, because it is what they have been convinced to belive is true. They are trained to be displeased with anything out of the religious norm.But how deep is their belief? is their soul so impregnated with religion that they would desriminate anything out side the bible's description ? As the inner catacism begins to amplify over what really is beneath, witch is sorrow, pain, and displeasure...? (4/4/2011)

---Religion is not a favorable topic that people generally like to debate, because it is what they have been convinced to believe is true. They are trained to be displeased at anything out of the religious norm.But how deep is their belief? is their soul so impregnated with religion that they would discriminate anything out side the bible's description of man? In the chrysalids this action is portrayed throughout the knowledge of Waknuk. As the inner catacism begins to amplify over what really is beneath, witch is agony, pain, and displeasure; it disguises societies discrimination.(6/4/2011)

BODY PARAGRAPHS: - start with the order of 1,3,2 in level - In the chrysalids the bible is mis used ! **-"And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus is not human. it is neither man nor woman. It is blasphemy against the true Image of God, and hateful in the sight of God."** __ this is the quote that drove waknuk into the wrong direction as it was like giving them a free pass to discriminate. __

4. Essay Outline (INTRODUCTION) ---Religion is not a favorable topic that people generally like to debate, it is something they have been convinced to call true. b ecause it is what they have been convinced to believe is true.(awkward phrasing and elaborate more on the part i highlighted.) They are trained to be displeased at anything different from norm.how does this sentence relate you your 1st sentence? Is their soul so impregnated with religion that they would discriminate anything outside the bible's description of man? In the chrysalids this action is portrayed throughout the knowledge of Waknuk. As the inner catacism begins to amplify over what really is beneath, which is individuality, disapproval,displeasure; and it could be misinterpreted as "the correct thing to do". meaning is unclear, convoluted sentence. Conclusively, In the chrysalids religion is used to disguise societies discrimination.good thesis (6/4/2011) Overall you should work on your phrasing. A lot of parts sound awkward. You can do it :)

Religion is not a favorable topic that people generally like to debate, it is something they have been convinced to call true. Post birth, their parents train them to be displeased at anything different from the norm, presuring them to participate in this belief. Would their soul be so impregnated with religion that they would discriminate anything outside the bible's description of man? In the chrysalids this action is portrayed throughout the knowledge of Waknuk. As their misinterpreted belief begins to justify over what really is beneath, which is individuality, disapproval,displeasure; and they considered it as "the correct thing to do". Conclusively, In the chrysalids religion is used to disguise society's discrimination.(9/4/2011)

Misconception, It is a awful subject to deal with in situations. It is believing, truly believing in what you have said heard or done. But what would happen if what you believed in was a lie, a misconception. In the Chrysalids this happens in various ways as Waknuk uses pieces of religion to discard "deviations". One of those reasons is their misinterpritation of this quote, "And any creature that shall seem to be human, but is not formed thus in not human. It is neither man nor woman. It is blasphemy against the true image of God, and hateful in the sight of God.", They saw this pasage as a way to descriminate, torchor, and humiliate people outside the norm and saw no harm in it as they believed that they where following Gods orders. What they did, was ungodly, they would transport "deviations" to the fringes where they had little food, they where separated from their family and where tied up. God's will was not so that his people would turn against their own, as the reader we know they where only deformed because of radiation. Thinking they where doing things rte is what led them to do things incorrectly.

The magnitude of the their ignorance was potent enough that they began to lose their mind. Parallel to that their belief was also growing stronger in the wrong derection. This quotation shows how the depth of the situation was covering their awareness, "As the sun rose we would sing a hymn while my father ceremoniously slaughtered the two-headed calf, four-legged chicken, or whatever other kind of Offence it happened to be. Sometimes it would be a much queerer thing than those**...",** Joseph Strorm(david's dad) kills thiese "deviations" again because he is "obeying" Gods will. In the bible it says that any creation of God shall not be killed, This secion of the bilble explains that even if they were "deviations" he should not have killed them. This demonstrates that they are no longer doing it to obey God but theyy are doing it repetativly unaware of the consequences.

As the generations past, they have to pass it down their beliefs to the next generation, the generation that will hopefully in their eyes continue the pattern. A small inocent child, pure to its nature, is embeded the vision of a divided world; the Godly side and the deviations. This quote shows the inocense in david and the influence of his religios parents,"A blasphemy was, as had been impressed upon me often eno ugh, a frightful thing. Yet there was nothing frightful about Sophie. She was simply an ordinary girl - if a great deal more sensible and braver than most.", he knows not why he is taught to push away irregularities but he does it for the sake of his dad. This constant reminder of what is rite and what is wrong,(which is something his father does not know the difference of) is what he does not understand yet contiues to live in it for the rest of his days.

It is really all ignorance and cruelty that this hatred is generated from, Gods image will never be changed or discoverd, so as thies dark days pass benieth them they will have to deal with the consequences of discriminating one of their own,for the rest of their lives.

5. First Draft of your Essay 6. Peer Comments - Group Members genevieve﻿ , susan , jesslyn

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concluding Paragraph 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay? 7. Good Copy in MLA format