Dae+Ho

1. Dae Ho Lee // Essay due - april 13th 2. Topic : 3 - religion is an important part of the lives of the people of Waknuk, but it is abused and manipulated in very unreligious ways.

Thesis - In the novel //The Chrysalids//, people of Waknuk misunderstood the true moral of Christianity and abused their own religion in a primitive, narrow minded and fearful society. Good idea, but wording can be improved

Intro - Who are Christians and what is their moral? They are neighbours of everyone and they love everyone. On the other hand, Christians in the novel //The Chrysalids// are the opposite//.// Since the tribulation, people of Waknuk discriminated mutants to soothe God's anger. They discriminated people and objects if their physical status did not match with the true image described in //Nicholson's Repentances//. The //Repentances// argues that the image they provided is the true image. However, no one knows whether those images described in the //Repentances// are the true image or not. Is this a misunderstanding of Old People's religious practices and their Christian morals? In the novel //The Chrysalids//, people of Waknuk misunderstood the true moral of Christianity, and abused their own religion to extreme in a primitive, narrow minded and fearful society. ( I said that your thesis needed rewording, yet you did not edit it, why? I still do not know what you will be arguing.)

main ideas : 2) People of Waknuk discriminates deviations (look over first half, first sentence) not "purification" that is described in the //Bible//. Every vegetation and animal classified as deviations are burned, and every (bad wording, ref﻿rase) human deviations were sent to the Fringes. For instance, Old Jacob said // "Repentances // says to keep pure the stock of the Lord by fire, but that's not good enough," and he meant that every deviation would be burned. In addtion to non-humans, Old Jacob also said "They mustn't be cleansed, they must be allowed to live, or die naturally. They must be outlawed and driven into the Fringes," 'they' are the mutants, and this is how deviations are treated based on the //Repentances//. It may appear that this is what Chrisitianity's moral is about, but truthfully, it is the //Repentances'// way of practices to soothe the (consider refrasing) God's anger, so tribulation doesn't come again. Preachers persuaded people of Waknuk that they are keeping the stock pure, not discriminating nor a murder. However, people of Waknuk clearly abused religion to discriminate deviations and to try to keep the lost track of the Old People. (Last sentence is unclear, try re wording) it is kind of hard to understand what you are arguing.

3) Christianity's true moral is love, but preachers' moral is to hate.

1) Religion created the community Waknuk; a primitive, narrow minded and fearful society.

5. First Draft of your Essay 6. Peer Comments - Group Members

Anika Julian Thalia

Person 1 - Introduction Paragraph 1.Does the introduction paragraph grab your attention? Does it anticipates an insightful thesis? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 2 - Body Paragraphs 1.How well are the quotations integrated and analysed? Have they been chosen with care and taken from a variety of chapters? 2.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

Person 3 - Concl﻿uding Paragraph 1.Does the conclusion include a reworded thesis, summary. 2. Does the conclusion have a memorable ending? 3.How strong is the development of the argument for the whole essay?

7. Good Copy in MLA format

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